Tyler Whitesides tried with "Janitors" but something didn't hit the mark.

I really tried to like this book.  I wanted to like Spencer.  He seemed like a good kid.  He cares about his family (even if he gets frustrated with his mother for being a little absentminded, and frustrated with his siblings for being messy) and he wishes he had the guts to stand up to bullies.  But he just doesn't strike me as the hero-in-waiting kind of character.  There's something missing in the introduction to the character that make all that he chooses to do seem realistic for him.  He just doesn't seem to have it in him to do what is written.


It doesn't help that the story tends to jump from point C to point L, filling in the gaps with half a paragraph of exposition.  I don't want to hear about what happened after the fact - I want to see it happening while it's happening.  The first time this is really noticeable, Spencer and his plucky side-kick, Daisy, are trapped in a bathroom stall of an inescapable bathroom with the school bully on the other side of the door, threatening to do all kinds of harm to them, and the only thing they have with which to defend themselves is a plastic babydoll.  Jump to later that day and find out that they were stuck in the stall for half an hour before they were rescued by the supposed good guys.  We never find out what happened in that half hour, though.  We figure the bully, Dez, never made it into the stall, but we don't know how scared Spencer and Daisy became, or if they were injured at all - if they grew closer as allies or started bickering because of their predicament.  These are important things to see in a story.  You need to know how your heroes act in tense situations early in the story so that you can see them surviving the dangers you know are ahead.


I have to take issue with the main premise of the story - the Toxites feeding on the brain waves of children while they are learning.  Seriously?  That's the evil monster that Spencer and the janitors have to face?  They don't cause physical damage, they just make you sleepy and make it harder to learn.  This does not strike fear into the heart of the reader.  I'm sorry, it just doesn't.  I mean, one of the monsters is referred to as a dust gofer.  How is that supposed to be scary?  It does make sense that it's the kind of monster Spencer would particularly dislike, as he is shown to be a person who prefers a tidy environment.  A monster made out of dust would be something of a menace to a neat-freak like Spencer.  However, it is hardly worth pulling out the big guns for - maybe just a big vacuum (though the weapon of choice of the janitors seems to be mops, not vacuums).


It's also difficult to believe that Spencer was so easily duped by the actual bad guys (who of course portrayed themselves as the good guys when they first met Spencer).  We started the book seeing how Dez would pick on Daisy (known for her gullibility) and yet Spencer just instantly went along with the word of an adult who seemed to want to get rid of the little monsters.  He hardly questioned the story Hadley told him at all, and he never wondered why Hadley was so quick to recruit Spencer into the fight.  Surely the government wouldn't see fit to hire 12-year-olds on a regular basis.  This thought may have given him a moment's pause, but nothing more.  He was quick to jump into the fray - which still feels like it's out of character for him.  Though we've only known Spencer for a few chapters at this point, the impression created in the first couple pages are that he is just not the kind to get his hands dirty and fix things himself.  He stands back and lets the world pass him by, only going so far as to keep his own little bubble clean and orderly.  He doesn't even bother trying to spread that sense of order throughout his own home (which he refuses to think of as his home because the house actually belongs to his aunt, but whatever).  He keeps his personal room tidy and that's it.  He doesn't even seem all that protective of his younger siblings.


I can't help but wonder if the character could have been more believable if written a little differently.  Maybe even the flimsy premise could have been exciting if the right words had been found.  Though there weren't any notable flaws in Tyler Whitesides' particular style, I just don't think he was the right writer for this story.  I might be willing to give the author another chance with a different set of characters, but I would not be interested in continuing the "Janitors" storyline any further.